Discarded R1 Pgs 9-12

:O! So much excitement!! What a plot twist! It's actiony, it's believable, and you made Kalaya into a convincing villain without making her downright evil. Lol at "sadistic gods" I dunno about you (Jaleel has faith in you, awww) but Kalaya would definitely say that about me XD I love that you're using her to exposit things about the world; it's very interesting.

And once again, way to end on a really intense action shot; that looks like it hurts!